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These days, many people have their own computer and telephone, so it is quite easy for them to do their job at home. Does working at home have more advantages or more disadvantages?

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Technological development has made it possible for almost every person to have a personal phone and computer which has resultantly made it possible for many working professionals to work from the comfort of
thier
of them or themselves
their
 homes. I agree that the advantages that working from
home
 brings clearly outweigh any associated disadvantages.
Firstly
, working from
home
 helps the employers to reduce
thier
of them or themselves
their
 operating expenses. Since the person is remotely at
home
, the spacing requirement for the office reduce drastically resulting in decreased rent and other
auxillary
someone who acts as assistant
auxiliary
 expenses including electricity and other
utilities
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utility
 charges. Working from
home
 is
also
 perceived positively by the
employees which
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employees, which
 significantly improves employee motivation and results in better performance.
Secondly
, the employee
also
 reaps great benefits
by
Suggestion
of
 working from
home
.
This
 not only helps the employees
to save
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save
 on
thier
of them or themselves
their
there
 commute time, which makes up a lot of time of the day due to traffic congestion at peak hours, but
also
 the cost associated with travelling.
Moreover
,
this
also
 gives the liberty to work at flexible hours.
This
 results in spending quality time with the family and friends,
hence
 improving the work life balance. Admittedly, there are some basic problems associated with working from
home
. These include problems in monitoring of employees as the employees might feel that they are not being watched and start taking advantage of
this
.
Also
, there could be a slight loss in synergy as compared to when the employees are working in the same location. In conclusion, i think that there might be some disadvantages associated with working remotely
such
 as difficulty in monitoring of the human resource but the benefits it yields are far more greater than any
such
 drawbacks
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