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As computers are being used more and more in education, there will be soon no role for teachers in the classroom.

#computers #education #role #teachers #classroom
There is no doubt
on
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about
 that when the vast development in the computer technology that leads to increase the usage of computers in
education field
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the education field
.To get more cede in
education computers
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education, computers
 are used because they use
animations
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Animations
to explain concept
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to explain a concept
 in interactive manner to the depth and they have
vast memory
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a vast memory
 of concepts.
Computer
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The computer
 seems very insecure for education because anyone can access
with
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to
there
of them or themselves
their
 knowledge and they might
to
to a degree exceeding normal or proper limits
too
change
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Change
 the context.Computers are not autonomous in the educational field that lead to take predefined ways to solve the paranoids that cause a
plagues
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plague
.They are not
lively interactive
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lively, interactive
 with the student these machines
are works
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Working
Are works
 on a predefined way.
For instance
,
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,
remote location like Himachal
pradesh
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Pradesh
,
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,
deep south India didn'
t
have
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Has
Have
 a primary
schools
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school
 so there if we employed the computers over there can cause the change in those towns.
Furthermore
,
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,
learning and teaching is not just easy as pie.For the above reason
,
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,
teachers are panacea because they
are autonomous to decide depends
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are autonomous to decide depending
are autonomous to decide depended
depend autonomous to decide
have autonomous to decide depended
are autonomous to decide depends
 on the situations and they can'
t
 make a session tedious.Teachers are lively
interact
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interaction
 with the children in class to make a session meaningful but some teacher
sheer
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Sheer
 from there topics because they don'
t
 want to make a session tedious. For the reasons above
,
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,
equivocal is the only
cure but
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cure, but
 while seeing
separately they
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separately, they
 don'
t
 rely on each other and having a many advantages and consequences separately. Teachers use a
computers
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computer
 to present their lessons to children to make them prolific.
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