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Some people think that the teenage years are the happiest times of most people's lives. Others think that adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibilities. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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The contention that teen
period
 of development is more blissful compared to
adulthood
 has remained unsettled. It is commonly believed by some
that notwithstanding
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that, notwithstanding
 the
herculean
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Herculean
 tasks associated with
adulthood
, adult life is filled with happiness than the teenage life.
This
 essay will
discuss the both
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discuss both the
 opinions and proffer my opinion in respect of the issue under reference. On one hand, some are of the view that teenage development stage is more blissful. The rationale for
this
 belief is because during
teenage
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the teenage period
period
, the individual is not saddled with any responsibility. The said individuals rely more on their parents or guardians for the provision of their basic needs namely shelter, clothing and feeding.
Hence
, they have absolutely nothing to worry about
save
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saving
 to focus on their respective studies.
For instance
, most students in the Nigerian universities commenced their university education
at
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in
 the teenage
period
. Their parents provide practically everything for them.
However
,
this
 has its own demerits as the individuals are bound to be reprimanded by the parents or their guardians at the slightest disrespect.
On the other hand
, it is believed by some that
adulthood
 stage is a better
period
 of development. In
this
 instance, despite the fact that the individuals involved have a lot of tasks to deal more particularly
on
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with
 the payment of their
bills namely
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bills, namely
, utility bills, house rent and provision of other basic needs, they enjoy unfettered freedom devoid of any inconvenience. In conclusion, I am of the firm opinion that
adulthood
 is more preferable as it gives me an opportunity to be in control of my life. There is
therefore
 no control of any sort from any parent or guardian as the case
maybe
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may be
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adolescence
  • fulfillment
  • responsibilities
  • exploration
  • long-term goals
  • sense of stability
  • carefree
  • contentment
  • well-being
  • life stage
  • unique opportunities
  • deep satisfaction
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