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In the past people liked to store knowledge in books. However, in the present, we prefer to store knowledge on the Internet. Do you think the advantages outweight the disantages?

Previously, citizens preferred storing the
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 by the traditional methods which were
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 technology nowadays. There are many discussions about online storage's advantages and disadvantages. In my opinion, I believe that the merits outweigh the demerits. First of all, the most common benefit is accessibility. The knowledge is stored on millions of websites, and users just need a digital device with a few clicks to approach
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thousands of
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. In the meantime,
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 need to have space, shelves and labour to manage them for a long period of time.
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, it is easier for users to access
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information
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 through digital devices than the
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, storing online knowledge allows individuals to edit and update the latest news which is not possible on paper
books
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. Once a printable material is published, it is impossible to change.
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, if there is any news, another version will be printed with a number of editions. That's why, electronic mode is the best
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 the availability of the latest material.
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 these merits are obvious, still there are some demerits.
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, the creditability of the
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 is hard to define. On the Internet, there are various data,
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 the resources are not able to clarify easily. That's why, another verification is recommended before spreading or trusting sentences.
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, sensitive
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 related to religion can lead to strikes, without verification. In Conclusion, devices became primary sources of
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 and
books
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 became secondary because with technology it is easy to access
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 users can find updates in a timely manner. There are a few negative sides too like the question of reliability. But the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure to have a clear introduction and conclusion that restate your main idea effectively.
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You present a clear opinion that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
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You discuss both advantages and disadvantages, showing a balanced view.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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