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SOME SAY YOU SHOULD ALWAYS MARR FOR LOVE; OTHERS SAY THAT IN AN UNCERTAIN WORLLD IT IS WISER TO MARRY FOR MONEY. DISCUSS BOTH POINTS OF VIEW AND GIVE YOUR OWN OPINION.

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Everyone desires to have a perfect partner for a happy life. Some people prefer to marry a
person
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 they are in
love
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 with, due to prior understanding and sentimental attachment. While others go
for
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to
 a wealthy spouse, ignoring the temporary pleasure of wealth and ever-growing greed. I strongly support the value of
love
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 for a
life-long
continuing through life
lifelong
companionship
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companion
.
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 of all, by marrying one’s beloved
person
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 lets a
person
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live with
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live, with
 whom one has already developed a certain level of understanding. It becomes quite easy to assimilate in a new family
setup
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set up
 when a
person
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 knows his spouse.
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, awareness of eating habits of husband helps his wife modifying her cooking style.
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 why, choosing
love
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 for wedlock gives ease of mutual understanding to the couple.
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, loving partners have their sentiments attached to each other which
develops
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develop
developing
 a long term
relationship
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 based on respect and care.
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, presenting
flower
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flowers
 to one’s wife is the true depiction of deep emotional connection. For
such
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 reasons,
love
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 becomes the
first
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 choice for several people for their wedding.
On the other hand
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, marrying someone because of one’s wealth merely gives temporary satisfaction. The reason is maintaining a certain level of richness is not in an individual’s
hands
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hand
 and ups and downs are mandatory.
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, bearing a huge business loss can disturb one’s
relationship
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 if based on money. Due to
this
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 reason, money-based wedding is nothing more than a short term happiness.
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, avarice is an ever-growing phenomenon. More and more demands cannot always be gratified by a partner that ultimately weakens a materialistic
relationship
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. Owing to
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 reasons, affluence should never be the
first
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 priority for matrimony. To conclude, some people value prior understanding and emotional attachment, supporting
love
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 to make marriage decisions.
On the contrary
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, some prioritize money, forgetting the ephemeral contentment and never-stopping desires. In my opinion,
love
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 should always be the top preference to attain
long and healthy
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a long and healthy relationship
relationship
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.
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