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Some people think the best way to solve the global environmental problem is to increase the cost of fuel. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #cost #fuel
Rise in the ecological hurdles is raising eyebrows of many environmental scientists around the world. Many individuals consider increasing petrol price can limit the world environmental difficulties and
this
 is the finest
way
 to do that. In my opinion, enhancing the cost of motor vehicle oil is one
way
 to solve ecological problems,
however there
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however, there
 are other ways
also
 which can help to curb environmental problems. On the one side, heavy taxes and other currency charges on fuel can limit the issues of
environment
. The economical class of youth will be effected with
increase
Suggestion
increases
the increase
an increase
 in
price
Suggestion
the price
 of fuel. It will persuade daily commuters to take public transport
instead
 of using their own vehicles.
In addition
 to that, it will force individuals to look for an alternative to fuel motor cars
such
 as electric cars.
For instance
, the Indian government is working on the model of electric vehicles by introducing charging points on highways to limit the emission of transport vehicles in
environment
Suggestion
the environment
. On the other side, plantation and protection of
environment
Suggestion
the environment
 can
leads
Suggestion
lead
 to minimizing environmental problems. Industrialization and development of cities has
decrease
Suggestion
decreased
 the
plants
Suggestion
plant
 level in urban regions,
therefore
, growing plants around the cities and especially on constructions near the highways can minimize
such
 problems by improving the quality of air. Various nations are working on green buildings these days. Those buildings are covered with small plants which can take up the pollution and convert it
in to
expresses motion to a point on, or within, something
into
 pure oxygen and makes the
environment
 healthier. In conclusion, Fuel price is one
way
 to curb
such
 issues,
however
, other ways like
increasing number
Suggestion
an increasing number
the increasing number
increasing numbers
 of trees are
also
 equally effective
way
 to deal these environmental obstacles.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • emissions
  • alternative energy
  • conservation
  • mitigate
  • renewable energy technologies
  • affordability
  • collective action
  • innovation in energy efficiency
  • global cooperation
  • environmental measures
  • pollution
  • economic disparity
  • revenue
  • sustainable development
  • environmental sustainability
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