Today, many people want to get married and have children in their thirties rather than when they are younger. Is it a positive or negative development?

These days, more couples wed after their
third
decade of life unlike a few years back when
newly
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the newly
wedded were much younger. I believe that
this
is a negative trend due to the increasing cases of
subfertility
and
health
challenges seen among those in their thirties. Couples in their thirties who want to start bearing children are often faced with the complication of reduced fecundity. In other word, it may be
difficulty
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difficult
sometimes for
such
couples to have children. Recently, the Society for Family
Health
, a non-governmental organization in Nigeria, explained that advanced maternal age is associated with
subfertility
and it recommends that couples should start their family when they are in their twenties.
Thus
, in order to prevent
huge expenditure
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the huge expenditure
on assisted reproductive techniques, people are encouraged to marry and bear children early.
Furthermore
, younger couples do not often have much
health
challenges
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challenge
and
as a result
, they can better manage their families even if they have a challenging occupation. Older couples
on the other hand
, are faced with the onset of certain
health
problems which occur with advancing age
such
as hereditary diseases and hypertension. Due to these
health
challenges coupled with the desire for career advancement, managing a young family with children is usually stressful. If these ones marry when they were in their twenties, their children may be teenagers before the onset of their
health
limitations and it will be much easier to manage these children. In conclusion, I am of the view that couples should marry and start having children in their twenties when they are fertile and have less
health
problems.
This
is an important step toward ensuring a happy family life.
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