In some countries young people have little leisure time and are under a lot of pressure to work hard in their studies. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?

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In nowadays young people are suffering from the lack of the time they spend much time on studying
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of having a rest time.There are some causes for
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problem.
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a number
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solutions
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should implement
should implemented
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problem. One possible reason for
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issue is, the competitive between
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to enter the
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students
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require as useful, just, or proper
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needs
to study for years to own a seat in a good
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students
the student
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highly
ranked
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conjunction used in comparatives
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their grades.Some
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have low
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in place of, or as an alternative to
instead
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relatively large in size or number or extent; larger than others of its kind
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talent.By
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engage in
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denotes a person or thing
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these
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will ensure to receive what they deserve. Another reason for
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issue is that, finding a good job
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universities
graduated students
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the principal activity in your life that you do to earn money
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, companies ask for more
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an attribute that must be met or complied with and that fits a person for something
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qualification
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degree it is not enough anymore.
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need to study more about different things.One solution is to impose the companies to
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use or manipulate to one's advantage
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the chance to improve
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ability without concentrating on other unnecessary things.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • high expectations
  • academic success
  • future success
  • competitive nature
  • modern education systems
  • top grades
  • prestigious universities
  • high-paying jobs
  • rise of technology
  • social media platforms
  • physical activities
  • relaxation
  • extracurricular demands
  • multiple responsibilities
  • economic factors
  • lower-income families
  • part-time jobs
  • academic pressures
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