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In many countries children are engaged in some kind of paid work, some people regard this as completely wrong while others consider it as valuable work experience, important for learning and taking responsibility. Discuss both these views and give your opinion

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Children are involved in different kinds of paid jobs in several countries. While some individuals view
this
 act as totally unacceptable, others think it is an essential opportunity for them. In my opinion,
this
 form of employment helps them to gain
work
 experience and knowledge, which will make them more financially responsible in future. The reason why many people believe it is completely
condemnable
 to make young ones to
work
 in order to get salary is that, it exposes them to a lot of danger including the risk of untimely death.
This
 age group
are not yet mature
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has not yet matured
 enough to fend for themselves on their own and they may get knocked down by moving vehicles on their way to
work
.
This
 is a common problem they face in a busy place
such
 as Lagos state, Nigeria. A survey done in
this
 region
last
 year by
Non governmental organization
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the non governmental organization
the Non governmental organization
a Non governmental organization
Non governmental organizations
, Save the children Network, revealed that they are more prone to death while transiting to
work
 than any other part of the population.
Hence
, it is necessary to discourage paid employment among them to reduce the incidence of untimely demise. The other side of
this
 debate, which I agree with,
opine
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opinion
 that
this
 type of engagement is a form of experience which culminates into shaping them to become more financially responsible.
This
 is because children are unlikely to squander money that they
work
 for by themselves.
Moreover
, it can
also
 encourage them to inculcate good saving habits at an early
age which might
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age, which might
 aid their success in
future
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the future
. The story of many business moguls comes to mind in
this
 case, most of their autobiographies available online show that, a good number of them had engaged in one form of paid engagements or the other which helped them to learn financial prudence. In conclusion, while others think that juveniles should not be exposed to engagements where they receive salary due to risk of untimely death, I believe that doing contrary will help them to gain experience which aid good
monetary
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money
 management.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Child labor
  • Exploitation
  • Minimum age
  • Work experience
  • Survival
  • Taking responsibility
  • Education
  • Poverty
  • Legal restrictions
  • Physical toll
  • Psychological impact
  • Cultural perceptions
  • International conventions
  • Economic impact
  • Work-study programs
  • Skilled labor
  • Unskilled labor
  • Developing economies
  • Moral implications
  • Professional development
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