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Politicians private lives should not be published in newspapers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#politicians #lives #newspapers
It is argued that public
servants
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servants'
 personal lives should not be allowed to print
in
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on
 papers.
This
 essay completely agrees with that statement because it could cause various health issues and
also
 deviates from the original work. Politicians often stay in
limelight
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the limelight
 and disclosure of private life leads to medical problems.
This
 could be
true especially
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true, especially
 with the persons dealing with anxiety and pulmonary concerns. They undergo tremendous stress with fear, which can sometimes cause mental disorder or a dreadful heart attack.
For instance
, Mr.Mathew a notable prime minister of the UK died in 2010
from
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of
 cardiac arrest while watching the news telecasted on television about his illegal affair with maidservant. Another reason is that public person's mind gets distracted from performing official duties related to the welfare of people. They concentrate more on protecting the image in the public to attain respect and to win over the opposition. Apparently, their important schedules are occupied with engaging in reading articles published about them
in
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on
 social media, papers and TV resulting in the failure in elections.
For example
, In 2016 Mr.Modi from India lost by 25% votes for the presidential nomination
as a result
 of deviation from
media
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the media
 during public campaigning. In conclusion, the media and newspapers should not be allowed to publish articles about private lifestyle and personal matters of the politicians because it triggers different health concerns and diverts them from conducting duties.
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