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Band 6.5

You work for an international company. You have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your job. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter • describe the training course you want to do • e x p l a i n what t h e c o m p a n y could d o t o help y o u • s a y how the course will b e useful for your job

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Dear Sir, I am writing
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 letter to inform you that I saw an advertisement yesterday which mainly focuses on learning
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 core skills and values. I want to enrol in
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course
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 for the growth and profitability of our
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. One of the training companies provides the
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 management
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 which will run from May 2025 to May 2026.
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course
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 provides all sessions online. The main focus of
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course
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 is on various aspects of
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 as finance, operational management, and
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 communication. I want a favour from your side that the company will allow me to take those days when I have to attend these classes. Actually, I have not received a schedule yet, but when I get it, I will let you know about that. After that, I will concentrate on my study and work as well. I think
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 programme will prove beneficial for me, as I am not confident in handling
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 meetings and unable to communicate with others perfectly. Joining
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course
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 will help me to become proficient in the
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 field. I hope you will definitely allow me to do
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course
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. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours sincerely, Sam

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task achievement
The letter could benefit from a clearer introduction stating the purpose more directly. Try to outline the points in the introduction for better clarity.
coherence and cohesion
Consider using more linking words (e.g., 'Furthermore', 'Additionally') to improve flow between ideas and paragraphs.
suitable writing tone
The letter has a polite tone which is appropriate for a workplace request.
complete response
You provided specific details about the course, including the duration and format, which enhances your proposal.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • training course
  • advanced project management
  • agile methodologies
  • risk management
  • stakeholder communication
  • corporate training
  • funding
  • time off
  • project management software
  • efficiency
  • successful project completions
  • collaboration
  • team members
  • clients
  • growth
  • profitability
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