Rich countries should allow jobs for skilled and knowledgeable employees who are from poor countries.Do you agree or disagree?

Developed countries benefit
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The developed countries benefit
of trade should be acknowledged to talented and brilliant worker's migrating from underdeveloped part of the world No knowledge is lost as it can be acquired from anyone who deem fit to offer their best. To start with, migrants from poor countries would give all it requires to survive in an unknown world
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To
this
fact
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the skilled and knowledgeable ones sacrifice all it takes by doing their jobs in a
well
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good
and pleasing manner so as to satisfy their employers and when
this
is noticed
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they are more valuable and their monetary aspect of life is attended to.
For example
, Nigerians are good in craft making and exceptional at it.If allowed to
exhibits
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exhibit
more of
this
in a country like the USA it will be a double
benefits
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benefit
to both parties.
Furthermore
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,
if jobs are provided for
this
brilliant worker's, the more developed the country will be in terms of
man power
the force of workers available
manpower
.
For example
, projects that
needs
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need
urgent and quick completion will be attended to within a short
timing
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time
and
this
will foster more advancement of projects like road and bridge making
In contrast
to all
this
plural of "this"
these
those
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,
if the opportunities are given to
this
worker's without be
monitoring
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monitored
and accessed on a regular basis
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they will divert all the gains and profits to their country home In conclusion
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even though there might be few lapses allowing the talented ones of poor countries to work in the western world
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the benefits of
such
outweighs it all.
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