Prison is the best punishment for the criminals. Discuss.

Reward and
punishment
is the natural phenomena, countries have
also
developed law and order system, in order to develop better societies. Some people believe that
imprisonment
is the ideal solution to punish the guilty, while
other
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others
reject
this
notion and argue that self realization of guilt is more important to eliminate crime in the
society
. There are different types of penalties and punishments for different levels of crimes,
such
as fine,
imprisonment
, death penalty etc. The purpose behind each of them is to realize individual their mistakes and make them avoid repeating them again. What if,
such
punishment
cannot improve a
person
or cannot change his or her thought. The purpose of the
punishment
is not achieved, if the
person
is not willing to change himself.
For
instance if
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instance, if
a
person
has committed an
offense
a lack of politeness; a failure to show regard for others; wounding the feelings or others
offence
and harmed somebody in his anger, so punishing him by putting him in jail might not help, whereas, making him realize the outcome or aftereffects of his act will be more fruitful as he might refrain from taking any
such
serious action again. Self realization of
mistake
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the mistake
is the biggest
punishment
that can make a
person
a better social being.
Counseling
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Counselling
at every step of life will develop a sense of right and wrong among people.
Furthermore
, people who design the structure of any
society
should focus more on the root cause rather than punishing
culprits
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the culprits
. Problems like poverty, illiteracy, unequal distribution of wealth leads to greater crime rate than
otherwise
. Putting efforts in improving those helps rather than punishing those who
are already suffered
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already suffer
have already been suffered
from
such
circumstances, which lead them to become criminal.
Moreover
, loopholes in systems should
also
be taken into account,
for
instance people
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instance, people
override
law
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the law
and save themselves by giving
bribe
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bribes
.
However
,
imprisonment
in contrast
is
also
important to some extent, where somebody is injurious to the
society
and not being able to improve himself despite of many warnings,
imprisonment
is the only way to keep
society
save
free from danger or the risk of harm
safe
. Prison is really not a comfortable place, so criminal may
also
avoid doing crimes, in order to save themselves from
going jail
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going to jail
.
Prime motive
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A prime motive
The prime motive
of
punishment
is to improve individual from committing crime again and again and
punishment
is the best way to do
this
,
however
,
imprisonment
is not the only way to do
this
. I personally believe that, nobody is a bad in
person it
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person, it
is only circumstances that makes
person
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people
a person
the person
bad,
hence
working on root cause will help to improve those criminals that results in
such
crimes.
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