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The rise of convenience food helped people keep up with the speed of modern life. What are the advantages of this trend? Do the advantages overweigh the disadvantages?

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As it says, necessity is the mother of invention; people keep trying to invent convenient ways to live
life
 comfortable manner. More and more researches are carried out, so that people can avail facilities in
life
. There are many benefits of having ready to eat
food
,
however
, there are certain drawbacks to it too, that a person should keep in mind, in order to keep a good balance between its merits and demerit.
This
 essay shall discuss both and will suggest a plausible conclusion based on rational justification. There are two basic things that define living a modern
life
,
first
 and foremost is the power to purchase facilities like; all the luxuries and comforts of
life
.
Secondly
, the ability to enjoy them and both are connected with another two factors
such
 as, money and
health
. One has to earn enough money means spend more hours
on
Suggestion
at
 work and
that is
 only possible when a person spends less
time
 on any other activity
such
 as, making
food
 to him or herself. It is one of the most times taking and tiring activity that needs to be done on
daily basis
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a daily basis
. The use of preserved
food
 has reduced
this
 problem to a great extent, now individual has no need to spend numerous hours in
kitchen
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the kitchen
a kitchen
.
This
 saves
time
 as well as energy, as it is quickest come
easiest way
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the easiest way
 of having
meal
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a meal
.
For instance
, a working woman can save its
time
 spend on preparing
food
 and can spend quality
time
 with family, in
this
 way she can keep a good work-
life
 balance.
In contrast
, as mentioned above,
ability
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the ability
 to enjoy greatly depends upon good
health
. Eating processed
food
 all the
time
also
 adversely affects
health
;
it
it is
it's
 got a number of harmful chemicals used for preservation. These days, it is a taboo talk how cancer is spreading due to the use of cane foods, due to excess use of it, as now; people prefer more of quick good than homemade healthy
food
. Other
health
 related issues
includes
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include
, obesity, increased insulin problem, high blood pressure are some of the most common
consequence
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consequences
 of using these products are.
Further
, it cannot beat the hygiene that, a family member can maintain when preparing
food
 for their loved ones. In conclusion, in order to pace with
this
 modern
time
, people
has
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have
 to
adopt
make fit for, or change to suit a new purpose
adapt
 facilities available to them and no doubt despite of having many disadvantages, its advantage overweight its negative effects
,
Accept space
,
but, for that,
person
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people
the person
a person
 should try to keep a good balance between a homemade
food
 and ready to eat
food
 so its dreadful effects could be minimized.
Submitted by Serhii Baraniuk on

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