In Britain, when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with other old people where there are nurses to look after them. Sometimes the government has to pay for this care. Who do you think should pay for this care, the government or the family? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

In Britain most of the times old-age people are
shifted
Suggestion
shifting
to old-age houses. In my opinion the expenditure incurred
on
Suggestion
in
for
the
care
of these people should be borne by their families because it was these old -age people who had been the bread-earners for their families for a long time. Now
this
is the time to pay them back.
when
Suggestion
When
these people were young, they raised their children, met all of their needs,
care
and supported their families in every possible way. If the families don't pay for their
care
,
this
will mean that they had completely disassociated themselves from affiliation with their parents. It will promote a culture where
elders
Suggestion
the elders
are not respected because paying for their
care
is
also
a way to show
care
for them and not doing so will mean becoming the part of a society where everyone is selfish.
it
Suggestion
It
will
also
encourage materialism among the people.
This
attitude towards old-age parents will
also
leave a bad impression on the children in these families and they surely will observe what their parents are doing to their
grand parents
a parent of your father or mother
grandparents
. Paying for the expenses of these houses should be regarded as the right of these people and not the
favor
promote over another
favour
father
towards them
cosindering
deem to be
considering
the fact that these expenses might be a small portion of their own wealth which they had been earning all their life. Keeping in view all of the above facts, the prime responsibility of paying for their
care
rests with the family as it will lead to a society with a lot of love and
care
for others especially for
elder
advanced in years; ('aged' is pronounced as two syllables)
older
ones.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Aging population
  • Elderly care
  • Nursing homes
  • Social welfare
  • Intergenerational responsibility
  • Caregiving
  • Financial burden
  • Quality of life
  • Pension funds
  • Healthcare policy
  • Taxation
  • Subsidies
  • Private insurance
  • Long-term care
  • Sustainability
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