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Question: Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. Task-To what extent do u agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, many individuals are of the view that we have a lot choices. I completely agree with them because we now live in an era where technology has provided us with many alternatives, and
also
 because we have the ability to do so freely. The
first
 reason why I admit that the various options that we can choose from these days, have become plenty is that, it is hard to resist the various options technology throws at us in various sectors.
For instance
, in the transportation industry, the choices were limited to camels and donkeys in the old day, but in recent years we are able to choose from either bicycles, cars, ships, aeroplanes or fast moving trains. It
is
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is, therefore
therefore
, clear that we are now indeed faced with a plethora of choices. Another reason why we can make different numerous decisions on our own is that it is within our right to do so. Humans, as part of their God-given privilege can decide to freely choose anything they want without any problem.
For example
, my
next
 door neighbour got married to his fifth wife
last
 week, his response, when asked why, was that he can make use of his freedom of choice as he pleases.
Hence
, we can conclude that, we are justified to take any choice that makes us happy as human beings. In conclusion,
this
 essay agrees that we, indeed, have a variety of options
in
Suggestion
at
this
 time and age due to the advent of technology and because we have the freedom to choose freely.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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