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Some people think that using animal for experiment is cruel but other people think that it is necessary for the development of science.Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Animal experimentation has been a debated issue for decades.Many people believe that it
is necessary for the development of science and others believe
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is necessary for the development of science and others believed
is necessary for the development of science and others believe
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The majority
 of people believe that laboratory
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 performs a great service for mankind.Animal testing has helped to advance medical and scientific knowledge.It is necessary to test new drugs on animals
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 to know if there is any level of danger contained in the drug
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how long something has existed
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 back in the early 80’s metronidazole was given to pregnant women.Obviously, it was not tested properly.All the children born within that year had one form of deformity or the other.By the time it was known that metronidazole was d cause of the deformity
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it was too late and nothing could be done to reform it’s adversity.
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Similarly, many
 important medical discoveries involved experimentation on animal. On the
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other hand
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other people believe that animals are
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 sentient being and humans have no right to exploit them.
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it is said that the benefits of research using animals do not justify the suffering caused.
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humans have no moral right to do experiments on animals
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the lives of these animals should be respected as well
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 alternative methods of research can be used.
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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