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Some people think studying from the past offers no benefits to today’s life, while others believe history is a valuable source of information for us. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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It is thought by some that studying
history
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 has no benefits, while
other
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others
 believe that it is an essential way of increasing knowledge.
This
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 essay will discuss the reasons behind both views as well as my point of view. Studying
history
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 is considered useless by some students, which might be due to the fact that it is supposed to be memorised when it becomes a part of their curriculum, which is difficult as well as unpractical. To illustrate,
history
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 is a dry subject because it contains a lot of dates, names of persons and places, so it is not easy to keep all those
information
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 in mind, that’s why students find it a tough subject
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 when they have to learn and memorise it for the purpose of
exam
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the exam
exams
, they consider it useless. Other people think that it is a great form of
information
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 because it provides the past knowledge to
young generation
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the young generation
, which is necessary to make them a responsible citizen.
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, youngsters when know their
history
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,
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,
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how their country came
in to
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into
 being, how much struggle their ancestors made, how long it took to be an independent country) they will ultimately value their country
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 to valuing their past leaders.
This
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 knowledge of
history
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 will create a positivity in their behaviour and will aid them to be a good citizen. In my opinions,
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history
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 is not an enjoyable subject, it is necessary to be studied for the purpose of transferring
information
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 from the past to
new generation
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a new generation
new generations
the new generation
.
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, there should not be any compulsion of memorizing it in educational curriculum. To conclude, studying
past
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the past
 is considered of no use because of some false educational practices; whereas, it is thought to be a valuable source of
information
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 for
new generation
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the new generation
 because it helps them to be the responsible citizens.
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