Because many problems we face today affect our whole planet, good relationships between countries are becoming more important than ever before. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

These days, we are surrounded by a lot of problems, and most of them are of
global nature
Suggestion
a global nature
. Because of
this
, some opine that proper relations among nations of different parts of the world are of utmost importance.
However
, I believe that there are other aspects to take into account apart from having
this
. It is undeniable that the past few years have witnessed a burgeoning growth in the global issues, including those we experience each day,
such
as all kinds of pollutions, health issues, global warming and food shortage, meaning that countries have to consider
this
on a serious note at
macro level
Suggestion
the macro level
a macro level
, something which can be done by exchanging information about these issues and resources that could help in deterring them. All
this
could probably be possible if nations have better relations and understanding among them.
For instance
, over the past few
years
Suggestion
Years
, China has been trying to make better connections with its neighbour countries in order to overcome
pollution especially
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pollution, especially
that of ocean water, and has already succeeded in its purpose by sharing useful techniques and tips to them.
This
clearly demonstrates that caring and sharing
are
Suggestion
is
now of utmost importance if we want to mitigate
this
worrisome predicament as they are the basis of having a nice relationship. In spite of above mentioned arguments, I believe that other potential ways should
also
be considered to practically approach
this
situation.
Firstly
, we as individuals need to contribute by changing the way we think for others, not just for ourselves. Take
under developed
relating to societies in which capital needed to industrialize is in short supply
underdeveloped
countries as an example, where we can find lots of people opting for private worn-out cars emitting carbon dioxide and other potentially harmful gases in the atmosphere over public buses, and these
exhaust
Suggestion
Exhaust
fumes not only create health related problems, but
also
contaminate the air. People do so to save just
few bucks
Suggestion
a few bucks
and do not care for others;
thus
, we need to take
this
individual-based approach into consideration
besides
having better relations. In conclusion, while acknowledging the positive implications of having
good understanding
Suggestion
a good understanding
between states, I concede that other alternatives like
reformation at
Accept comma addition
reformation, at
individual level
Suggestion
the individual level
an individual level
and thinking for others are
also
important.
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