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Wild animals have no place in the 21st century and the protection is a waste of resources. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

#animals #place #st #century #protection #waste #resources
In the recent times
,
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,
natural environment
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the natural environment
have been explored
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has been explored
 to enable development. Thereby promoting the protection of wildlife. It is a debated issue whether these wild animals have no place in the 21st century and
also
 if their protection by keeping them in a
zoo
 is a waste of resources. I agree that these animals should be protected and taken care of with they following points. Some many animals are going extinct because other animals prey on them. These endangered species need to be protected to enable procreation and continuation of life.
Furthermore
, keeping the animals in the
zoo
 enables scientists to carry out scientific experiments
,
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,
genetic
modifications etc
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modifications, etc.
modifications etc.
 that will be of benefit to the animal world.
Although
 most people believe that
its
it is
it's
 a waste of resources in keeping these animals in the
zoo
,
similarly
,
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,
many
zoo
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zoos
 are used for tourist attractions which in turn helps to generate money for the government.
For instance
 the South African parkway
zoo
, millions of people from different parts of the world visit the
zoo
 every year and money is generated.
In addition
, schools can learn about wildlife by going
to
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on
 excursions at the
zoo
.
Finally
,
in as much
(followed by as) in such a degree; in such a manner; seeing that; considering that; since
inasmuch
 as development is the major attribute of the 21st century, these
widelifes
all living things (except people) that are undomesticated
wildlife
are always put
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is always put
 into consideration. Proper care and attention is given to each one of these animals which is what every living thing needs for survival. In conclusion,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 pen
down sayin
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down, saying
down saying
 that these wild animals should be protected and not to be left to survive on their own.
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