Some people think that children should begin their formal education at a very early age and should spend most of their time on school studies. Others believe that young children should spend most of their time playing. Compare these two views. Which view do you agree with? Why?

Education
has the most important impact on our lives. We get our
education
since we are small. Some people would agree that children should get their
education
since they are small, others would disagree with that. In my view, I would strongly support that young children should spend their
time
playing because of
few reasons
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a few reasons
. The
first
important reasons is that they are not responsible enough to get their knowledge. In order to go to school or to study, you should be mature enough and dependable to get your
education
very
efficiently
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efficient
. So, if
children's mind
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the children's mind
still thinking about playing and about many other thinks rather than studying, they
can not
can not
cannot
benefit from their
leasier
time available for ease and relaxation
leisure
time
.
For example
, I have
small daughter
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a small daughter
at
age
4 years. She
spend
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spends
has spent
her
time
playing with her barbie and watching television.
Once
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One
day, I decided to
enroll
register formally as a participant or member
enrol
her in the preschool. Sadly, she spent the whole month crying because she could not understand anything. Her mind is confused and cannot write her homework because she depends on me to finish it for her.
Consequently
, I decided to take her off from the school. Luckily, I realized that it is too early to put her in the heavy educational system and she
wont
will not
won't
be happy with that. I know every
time
has its
age
to
enroll
register formally as a participant or member
enrol
in it. AS you can see, my daughter
has not had been relax
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is not relaxing
isn't relaxing
doesn't relax
does not relax
has not relaxed
hasn't relaxed
was not relaxing
and enjoy her
age
if I put her in a system that she could not understand it. The
second
important reasons
is
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are
that early learning will reduce their productivity when they grow up. When we let our children to
enroll
register formally as a participant or member
enrol
in the
education
field in early
age
, they have to wake up early and finish their work on
time
and they
wont
will not
won't
have
time
to play. Sadly, when they become older all the work became not enjoyable even if they have a deep experience. . So, it will fasten the consumption of their power.
For instance
, once day my father told me his story about how his family
let
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lets
him
to get
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get
his
education
at
age
4b years. Surprisingly, my father got his master degree in
after
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over
20. He became professional in every
things
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thing
and many people
was
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were
proud of him. Sadly, my father did not have the
time
to play or to enjoy their
time
like other children. When he became 50 years old, he tired and he had not anything to give because all his thoughts was consumed.
This
experience taught me that I
wont
will not
won't
want
let my children to
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let my children
lose their childhood with studying. In sum,
education
is important to
everyone but
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everyone, but
it has its
age
. Children should spend most of their
time
playing because they are
nor
negation of a word or group of words
not
dependable and they will lose their power early. So
,
Accept space
,
all of us should support let children
to play
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play
most of the
time
.
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Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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