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People claim that there are more disadvantages of a car than advantages.

#people #car
It is a debatable issue whether the use of
car
Suggestion
the car
cars
 has more disadvantages than advantages. In my opinion the pros outstrip the cons. Recently, cars are known to be an article of dress, without which we feel incomplete and uncertain.
Furthermore
,
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,
it is the most
convinent
suited to your comfort or purpose or needs
convenient
 means of transportation and easily accessible. Unlike the
areoplane
an aircraft that has a fixed wing and is powered by propellers or jets
aeroplane
 and ship, driving
of
Suggestion
by
car
 is less stressful and complicated.
Also compared
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Also, compared
 to other means of transportation, cars are quite cheaper to maintain. The invention of cars has in one way or the other contributed towards development which has solved the problem of unemployment.
For instance
, the automobile industries repair and sell
car
parts making
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parts, making
 it easier for cars to be fixed.
This
 industry is located mostly at every nook and cranny of
city
Suggestion
the city
a city
 and employs so many people.
Secondly
, the gas stations which are built to have restaurants, mini marts
also
 have people who work for them.
Finally
,
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,
cab drivers, use their cars to generate a source of livelihood.
Conversely
, there are problems associated with the use of
car
Suggestion
cars
the car
a car
 which includes air pollution.
Similarly air
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Similarly, air
 pollution is known to be one of the major causes of global warming
,
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,
health issues
such
 as lung cancer.
In addition
, so many cars on the road causes traffic congestion due to the fact that it is affordable and easy to operate
,
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,
people see it as a necessity.
Consequently
,
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,
accidents are reported daily due to heavy traffic on the road. In summary, there are two sides to everything but
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 still agree that the advantages of
car
 outweigh its disadvantages.
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