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Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others belive it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for qualification. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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Students
 attend university to improve their prospects and find suitable employment after graduation.
For
this
 reason, some feel that they should focus all their energy on their main
subjects
 to gain a relevant qualification. Others want a more well-rounded education, so they try to learn about additional
subjects
. It is perfectly reasonable for
students
 to enter university with a strong sense of curiosity and a desire to learn as much as possible. Unfortunately, we tend to put
subjects
 into artificial
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bodies
, suggesting that business, art and science are not connected. If
students
 become too focused on a single area, it may stifle their initial curiosity, limiting their potential. They could
also
 graduate with a very narrow skill set that doesn't translate well to the current job market, which often favours those who have taken a multidisciplinary approach to their studies. Despite
this
, caution is certainly needed. The more we learn about a subject, the more complex it becomes. Gaining
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in-depth, specialist Knowledge of a subject requires a certain level of focus and dedication over a long period. If we try to learn about too many things at once, our Knowledge may lack the depth required to obtain a qualification. If they are not careful, young people could begin to lose interest in their main
subjects
, which would be detrimental to their studies.
While
 learning about other
subjects
 is not necessarily a bad thing, 1 believe university
students
 should ensure that their main
subjects
 remain the priority so that they do not lose sight of their objective: gaining a qualification.
Then
 they can calculate how much time, energy and headspace they have left for learning about other topics.
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