At the present time, the population pof some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults ,compared to the number of older people. Do the advantages of the situation outweighs the disadvantages ?

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The

population

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ratio

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of youngsters to that old aged people found to be numerous in the current days among few countries

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Few people say that these

difference

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differences

ratio

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seems

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seem

beneficial

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while some other people say that

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situation itself is futile. According to my view, the old aged people

population

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is never decline

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is never declining

has never declined

never declines

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This

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difference in

population

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should remain null

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A plant can never sustain without roots

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similarly

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, one cannot lead their lives without elders

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elder people

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The Elder people ratio

Elder people ratio

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should not be dropped

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since ancient times elders had been teaching traditional values and culture to us

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Let’s consider an example

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Ram and Razvan family

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Ram’s family

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The Ram’s family

had imbibed the values of culture and tradition from their grandparents whereas Razvan’s family were modern with lack of

cultural

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culture

and tradition in the family

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, Razvan’s family faces many problems.

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, elder people

teaches

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teach

many human values and qualities

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as discipline, staunch behaviour, respecting elders and many

other

plural of other; the people or things not already mentioned

others

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, old aged people

plays

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play

vital role

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a vital role

population

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ratio

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country

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the country

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elders

teaches

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teach

us many tactics to lead

life

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a life

the life

smartly,

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as preparing home-made products

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medicines and food and many other life hacks

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Let’s consider an example

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Shelly had stomach ache

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In spite of her condition she visited

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with

grand parents

a parent of your father or mother

grandparents

home. After listing to the problem her grandmother prepared a syrup and taught her how to prepare

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As a result

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Sally stomach ache vanished

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Elders not only dominates in decision making in

family but

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the family, but

the family but

also

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they withstand for family and

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country welfare

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the country's welfare

country's welfare

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In conclusion

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Elder people are eminent in

family

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the family

as well as in

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country

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the country

hence

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population

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the population

of old aged people must remain in the good

ratio

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The decline in

population

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ratio

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of old aged people leads to

disastrous

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disaster

in family and

country

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Serhii BaraniukTue Jun 18 2019

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At the present time, the population pof some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults ,compared to the number of older people. Do the advantages of the situation outweighs the disadvantages ?

Your opinion

Some people think that the main factor influencing a child’s development these days are things such as tv, friends and music. Others believe that the family still remains more important. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays, many young people are attracted to dangerous sports such as snowboarding or mountain biking. What makes these sports so attractive? What measures should be taken to minimize the risks?

Many of the products we buy nowadays break or wear out very quickly. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this for manufacturers and the public?

In mordern times, children are spending less time with their families and more time with their friends. 1. Why has this change occured? 2. Do you think parents should force their children to spend more time at home?