At the present time, the population pof some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults ,compared to the number of older people. Do the advantages of the situation outweighs the disadvantages ?

The
population
ratio
of youngsters to that old aged people found to be numerous in the current days among few countries
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Few people say that these
difference
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differences
in
ratio
seems
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seem
beneficial
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while some other people say that
this
situation itself is futile. According to my view, the old aged people
population
is never decline
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is never declining
has never declined
never declines
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This
difference in
population
should remain null
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A plant can never sustain without roots
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similarly
, one cannot lead their lives without elders
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elder people
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The Elder people ratio
Elder people ratio
ratio
should not be dropped
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since ancient times elders had been teaching traditional values and culture to us
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Let’s consider an example
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Ram and Razvan family
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Ram’s family
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The Ram’s family
had imbibed the values of culture and tradition from their grandparents whereas Razvan’s family were modern with lack of
cultural
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culture
and tradition in the family
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Consequently
, Razvan’s family faces many problems.
Secondly
, elder people
teaches
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teach
many human values and qualities
such
as discipline, staunch behaviour, respecting elders and many
other
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others
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Hence
, old aged people
plays
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play
vital role
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a vital role
in
population
ratio
in
country
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the country
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Furthermore
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elders
teaches
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teach
us many tactics to lead
life
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a life
the life
smartly,
such
as preparing home-made products
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medicines and food and many other life hacks
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Let’s consider an example
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Shelly had stomach ache
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In spite of her condition she visited
to
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with
by
grand parents
a parent of your father or mother
grandparents
home. After listing to the problem her grandmother prepared a syrup and taught her how to prepare
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As a result
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Sally stomach ache vanished
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Elders not only dominates in decision making in
family but
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the family, but
the family but
also
they withstand for family and
country welfare
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the country's welfare
country's welfare
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In conclusion
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Elder people are eminent in
family
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the family
as well as in
country
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the country
,
hence
population
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the population
of old aged people must remain in the good
ratio
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The decline in
population
ratio
of old aged people leads to
disastrous
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disaster
in family and
country
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