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The tradition that family gets together to eat meals is disappearing. What are the reasons? What are the impacts?

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In the past, all the family members used to have meals together,
however
, nowadays, these
ocassions
something you have to do
occasions
 are rare. In
this
 essay, the reasons for why
this
 tradition is disappearing and its effects will be discussed. There is a plethora of reasons for
this
 to occur. One of the major reasons would be that, the family members who work might not come back home early enough and have meals with their children, owing to, them preferring to work for extra hours.
Moreover
, the cooking skills are not being passed down to younger generations, and
hence
nowadays more number
Suggestion
the nowadays number
nowadays number
 of people do not know how to cook for themselves or for their family, which affects them and essentially resulting in not getting together and having their meals. Apart from the
obove
at a higher position than
above
 reasons, there might be traffic congestion in their area and in the peak hours, the vehicles might move at a snails pace, leading to, them not reaching their homes early enough to have dinner along with the kids. So, they might persuade their children to eat early and
then
 have their meals later on. There is a tremendous impact on the families due to not having meals together. As in, not being able to spend some quality time with their kids or other family members,
hence
, not having many opportunities to bond with each other.
This
 might lead to fall
outs
Suggestion
out
 in their relationships either with their young ones or their other half. In conclusion, the tradition of having meals together as a family is discontinuing these days and the causes for these might be that they are stuck at their
work places
a place where work is done
workplaces
 or in traffic or not having any skills to cook good and edible food.
This
 might negatively affect the relationships in the family,
such
 as not being able to spend
uality
an essential and distinguishing attribute of something or someone
quality
 time with each other.
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