Discipline is an ever increasing problem in modern schools. Some people think that discipline should be the responsibility of teachers while others think that this is the role of parents. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Discipline is necessary in every walk of life. Different people have different mindset. Some section of society deem that
the strict
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stricter
rules should be
inculcate
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inculcated
by their teacher while others opine that it of their parent’s duty. The following paragraphs would shed the light on the approaches before making
final conclusion
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final conclusions
a final conclusion
the final conclusion
along with my
perceptive
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perceptions
perception
. To commence with the
first
notion, there are myriad of things to be noted.
First
and foremost, in order to have good strong and everlasting relations with the family members, the parents have to closely observe the negativity of their children.
Secondly
, as parents are more engaged in children’s activities, they better understand their
behaviors
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviours
behaviour
.
For instance
, when the children are in wrong path or about to opt wrong
ways
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ways, such
such
as drug
addition
being abnormally tolerant to and dependent on something that is psychologically or physically habit-forming (especially alcohol or narcotic drugs)
addiction
, taking
shortcut
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a shortcut
in
life
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life, then
then
parents are the one who helped their children to follow the right track.
However
, it is undeniable that the teachers
also plays
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also play
an important role in making the students ready for the educative society.
This
is because they control their
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
in school premises.
Furthermore
, some parents are blind to see the negativity of their children, in that case instructor
are
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is
the one who can see
this
and control their habits. Having discussed the arguments and counter arguments, I would like to infer that it is the joint effort of school instructor and parents in order to discipline their students/children for the better world. In crux, both
teacher
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teachers
and parents are necessary in building good etiquette and
behaviors
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
behaviours
for the future generations. So, It has been crystal clear that both are necessary for the independent and dynamic youngster.
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