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Culture and tradition around the world today are more similar than they used to be. What are the reasons? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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World
Suggestion
The world
 is becoming a smaller place and different countries around the
world
 are having similar culture and tradition compared to the past. The main
reason reason
a rational motive for a belief or action
reason
 behind
this
 change is the advancements in technology.
This
 should be considered as a positive development since
this
 would help to bring societies and people closer. Technological advancements
has made
Suggestion
have made
 it possible for people in different countries
to know
Suggestion
know
 about each other. Internet plays a key role in
this
 change by making it possible for developing awareness about various places around the
world
 and lifestyle and customs that they follow.
This
 makes people more interested and they are even ready to accept those traditions that they find attractive and beneficial. Another important reason is the improvement in transportation facilities. Now a
days
Suggestion
day
, we are able to travel from one place to another within no time. Journeys that took days and months are taking only a few
hours thereby
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hours, thereby
 promoting tourism industry to a great extend. People are travelling all over the
world
 to know more about other places and are becoming more knowledgeable different culture and adapting and practicing few in the process.
For instance
, Kashmir is a beautiful place in North
India which
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India, which
 was unknown to the outside
world
. Now,
this
 is one of the most popular tourist
attraction
Suggestion
attractions
 in India.
Hence
, development in technology has helped a lot in helping to know outside everyone's boundary.
This
 ought to be considered as a positive development due to various reasons. People are becoming more and more close since they understand others and
this
 in turn helps in business developments thereby improving countries economy. Another arena where we could see the impact is in the education sector. A large number of students are going abroad for studies without hesitation since they are aware of the lifestyle of people and they
wont
will not
won't
 have difficulty in adjusting in
foreign land
Suggestion
a foreign land
foreign lands
.
Also
, people have become more considerate and have started to appreciate all the different traditions around. To conclude, it is a fact that unlike
older
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
 times, culture and tradition are becoming similar around the
world
. Technology had made
this
 possible and
this
 in turn should be seen as a positive change.
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