Due to the development and rapid expansion of supermarkets, many small local businesses are unable to compete. Some people think that the closure of local business will bring about the death of local communities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is considered that, due to the progress and rise of supermarkets, small-scale businesses are not able to run. While some believe that the closing of local businesses will lead to the local communities, I think that supermarkets will diminish the local businesses up to a high level;

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, it can

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bring positive effects on the local people. On the one hand, the rise of supermarkets

result

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results

in the downfall of local businesses. People opting for different products from these large markets hardly rely on

items purchasing from

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purchasing items from

local shops and

centers

an area that is approximately central within some larger region

centres

counters

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, a recent survey by the Asian development bank indicated that the enormous expansion of supermarkets in

Dubai leads

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Dubai, leads

to the closing of local businesses up to 80%.

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, the progress of large-scale markets is responsible for the fall of local trade up to a high-level.

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however

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, the boom of large-scale markets can bring advantageous outcomes to the local community.

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, gigantic businesses operating are delivering standard products, which would enrich the lifestyle of local people through advancement.

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, diapers available at large markets are medically safer to use for the children than the one available at local level.

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, the development of supermarkets is beneficial in terms of the

modernization it

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modernization, it

brings among local people.

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is because opting for quality products bring an advancement of

behavior

manner of acting or controlling yourself

behaviour

and lifestyle in people.

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, growth of supermarkets

have

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has

benefits in terms of providing standard items and modernization. In conclusion,

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some considered that the growth of supermarkets have negative effects on local businesses, as they will

closed

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as a result

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, In my view, it can be detrimental to the running and

operating

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operation

of local businesses highly; whereas, it can

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bring positive outcomes in the form of the availability of the quality products and modern way of lifestyle.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.5

Complete response

7.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

306 words

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Due to the development and rapid expansion of supermarkets, many small local businesses are unable to compete. Some people think that the closure of local business will bring about the death of local communities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Some people think that children should start school at a very early age, but others believe that they should not go to school until they are older.

Some people believe that children should be allowed to go out for outdoor activities. While others believe that children should stay at home most of the time. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

As computers are being used more and more in education, there will be soon no role for teacher in the classroom.

Some countries achieve international sports by building specialised facilities to train top athletes, instead of providing sports facilities that everyone can use. Do you think this is positive or negative development? Discuss both views and give your opinion.