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You took your family to a nearby restaurant. You were disappointed with the meal and wish to complain to the manager. Write a letter to the manager of the restaurant. In your letter, » explain why you were at the restaurant » describe the problems » write about the action you want the manager to take Write atleast 150words

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Dear Sir, I am writing to express my dissatisfaction
towards
Change preposition
with

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 the unpalatable meal my family and I were served when we visited your restaurant (People’s Delight) located at Number 8 Kofo Abayomi street Lagos, yesterday the 8th of June 2019. We were just issued our Canadian Visas despite all the challenges people faced to acquire it, so it called for celebration and lunch in a reputable restaurant,with my husband and three children
was
Change the verb form
were

The singular verb was does not appear to agree with the plural subject children. Consider changing the verb form for subject-verb agreement.

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 most ideal . My children preferred to have rice and plantain while my husband and I had porridge beans. The rice was too salted that my daughter whose love for rice is out of
this
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 world had to reject the meal at the
first
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 spoon she took. The beans had lots of stones in
it
Correct pronoun usage
them

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 as I even bled on my tongue due to
this
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. We all came with an empty stomach to fill it up with food at your restaurant. I would have asked for a refund but taking my present suggestion and implementing it , is enough for me. In order
avoid
Fix the infinitive
to avoid

It seems that the use of particle to may be incorrect here.

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 losing your customers, it is important you send all your cooks to a reputable catering school to learn the rudiments of cooking and avoid leaving a bad taste and
feeling
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feel

It appears that your sentence or clause uses an incorrect form of the verb feeling. Consider changing it.

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 of your eatery to clients. Hoping to
seeing
Change the verb form
see

The to-infinitive that follows the verb Hoping requires the base form. Change seeing to the base form.

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 drastic actions being taken to avert
further
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 occurrences. Yours Faithfully Nina Mark

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unforgettable evening turned disappointing
  • anticipation
  • patronage
  • culinary experience
  • subpar
  • palate
  • lackluster service
  • rectify
  • compensation
  • amicable resolution
  • clientele satisfaction
  • due diligence
  • apology
  • quality assurance
  • redress
  • expectation management
  • constructive feedback
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