Is fast food to blaim for obesity in society or is gaining too much weight is the responsibility of the individuals? What are the factors contribute the obesity? Why do you think that children are becoming obese.

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Fast
food
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is the vogue among the masses which increase the obesity.
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there are some other factors of gaining
fat
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fat, thus
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people suffer from several health issues.I cast light these reasons in the upcoming paragraphs.
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with,
majority
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the majority
of the people are suffering from the unwanted fat.
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is due to the fact that
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many of them do less exercise and
phyisical
involving the body as distinguished from the mind or spirit
physical
activities which are the extremely important sources to remove obesity.
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sandatory
requiring sitting or little activity
sedentary
lifestyle is
also
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the biggest reason of overweight because people have to do sitting job where they have to stick
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to
the one seat.
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, people who are working
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with
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companies they have to stick to their places for the whole day.
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, intake of more processed
food
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is
also
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the
greates
highest in quality
greatest
issue of overweight.
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is owing to the fact that, individuals prefer to eat packed
food
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which had low calories and too much oil. It is many harmful for them as they obtain many health issues
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as heart disease, asthma.Apart from
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, parents
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play
an
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a
significant role to gain the weight in their
offsprings
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offspring's
life They prefer to take them in restaurants rather than provide them
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tending to promote or preserve health
hygienic
food
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at home.
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, Students like to eat junk
food
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in restaurants as they away from their home
food
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. To conclude, after
analyizing
consider in detail and subject to an analysis in order to discover essential features or meaning
analysing
both the paragraphs I believe that people are responsible for their obesity while doing so many things in their life which creates various health issues.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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