In many countries in the world people buy clothes and choose hair styles according to latest fashion. Why is this happening? Is this a positive or a negative development?

People
Suggestion
The people
of the world today always
love
to appear trendy.
This
phenomenon can be attributed to a number of reasons.
Nonetheless
,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
hold the opinion that purchase of fashionable clothes and preferences for different latest hair styles are
unconstructive
development
Suggestion
developing
developed
in our society. The reasons as well as the damaging effects of keeping up with today's
fashion
will be discussed below. Several factors are attributable to why people keep up with the latest
fashion
. One of
such
is the popularity of a person within the society. When a person is popular
,
Accept space
,
well-known and is a celebrity
,
Accept space
,
he or she will always be conscious of his or her appearance by trying to look good and
appealing always
Suggestion
always appealing
.
This
can only be through the constant purchase of fashionable attires and wearing of stunning hairdos.
For example
,
majority
Suggestion
the majority
a majority
of musicians, all over the world, always have
high sense
Suggestion
a high sense
of
fashion
.They put on gorgeous and trendy attires, loud and head-turning hair styles so they can keep being attractive to people and
also
to be relevant
in
Suggestion
to
the show business. Another reason is simply an individual undying
love
for fashionable and elegant looks at all times. Some people, most especially the youth, have a huge taste and great
love
for looking trendy always. They achieve
this
by buying elegant dresses and wearing lovely hairstyles. Youthfulness always comes with exploration and adventure and so the youth of today
love
to keep up to date with new trends.
For example
, a sales analysis of a popular
fashion
store in my state showed that 70-80%of their annual sales come from their younger customers. Negative consequences of buying latest clothes and choosing of current hairdos are not
farfetched
Suggestion
far fetched
. One of the detrimental effect of
this
habit is theft of money or wears by the individual in question which is usually
as a result
of the exorbitant cost of these fancy clothes.
For example
, a boy of eighteen years was once reported to have stolen a huge amount of money from his parents so that he could buy an expensive designer attire for his prom. To sum up,
Although
different factors
such
as being a celebrity or sheer
love
for
fashion
make people purchase fancy clothes and wear fancy hairdos,
this
habit,
however
,
bring
Suggestion
brings
about some bad and illicit behaviours in people.
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