QUESTION: Some people think that public health is the responsibility of the government While others think that people should be responsible for their own health. Discuss both sides and give your answer

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According to research, it has been discovered that more people are dying from curable and preventable diseases recently.

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has led to various schools of thought on how

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trend can be reversed. A school of thought is of the opinion that the wellness of the populace is a duty of the government while others believe that people’s

wellbeing

a contented state of being happy and healthy and prosperous

well-being

depends on the people themselves. Both

school

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schools

of thoughts will be reviewed and a position made. There are many things that the government need to put in place to help improve the health of her people. One of

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is proper remuneration of medical personnel working in hospitals. Proper remuneration will make these staff work optimally, it will

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encourage more people to join the medical profession

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reduce patients to staff

ratio thereby

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ratio, thereby

ensuring availability of quality medical services at all times to people. In

Nigeria

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Nigeria, for

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, there are more than 5,000 patients to a doctor due to the fact that most of the doctors have travelled out for greener pasture and

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has led to bad medical services being rendered.

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The people

have active roles to play when it comes to taking care of their health, one of

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is by doing physical exercises. According to researches, physical exercises have been proven to prevent obesity,

diabetics

a polygenic disease characterized by abnormally high glucose levels in the blood; any of several metabolic disorders marked by excessive urination and persistent thirst

diabetes

, pulmonary and other diseases. When people work out, they burn off excess food intake, preventing build-up of high blood sugars which will eventually lead to

diabetics

a polygenic disease characterized by abnormally high glucose levels in the blood; any of several metabolic disorders marked by excessive urination and persistent thirst

diabetes

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, it has been reported that

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most elderly

people can be found in Japan, due to the fact that Japanese eat well and exercise properly. The health of a nation is everybody’s business. I believe that both government and the people have active roles to play to ensure the wellness of its people. Government

need

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needs

to ensure that medical personnel are well paid so that they can be continually motivated while people should ensure they exercise daily.

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

321 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Public health
Government responsibility
Individual responsibility
Vaccination programs
Anti-smoking campaigns
Subsidized medical services
Healthcare accessibility
Socioeconomic status
Food safety regulations
Pollution control
Occupational safety
Lifestyle choices
Self-education
Proactive management
Personalized healthcare
Comprehensive health system

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QUESTION: Some people think that public health is the responsibility of the government While others think that people should be responsible for their own health. Discuss both sides and give your answer

Include an introduction and conclusion

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