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Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair. Discuss both of these views and give your own opinion.

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Because of technology and mass media, competitive sports have become increasingly popular, in recent decades.
Therefore
, some people believe that sports professionals deserve to earn higher than individuals in other professions while others are of the opinion that
this
 is highly unfair. In
this
 essay, I will discuss both sides and justify why I believe that there are several other professions that deserve the high pay that sportsmen are fortunate to
recieve
get something; come into possession of
receive
. Sportsmen represent their nation at an international level, so, governments are willing to pay them high salaries to maintain the public image of the country.
However
, these individuals do not play a direct role in the betterment of the nation
although
 several other professionals do. Teachers shape the minds of the future leaders of the world. They instill in them the characteristics important for conflict resolution, empathy and decision making, but still
recieve
get something; come into possession of
receive
 a low salary. Another set of persons that deserve a good pay are law enforcement officers, who put their life on the line to protect the citizens of a nation, yet
recieve
get something; come into possession of
receive
roughly quarter
Suggestion
a roughly quarter
 of the salaries of the sportsmen. In conclusion, I strongly believe several other people that do good for the society deserve to make at least half, if not as much as what the sportsmen currently make. Only if
this
 change takes place will the younger generation gravitate towards important fields like science and technology.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial remuneration
  • exceptional
  • merit
  • talent
  • demand
  • entertainment value
  • career span
  • physical demands
  • justified
  • unfair
  • criticism
  • income inequality
  • societal priorities
  • sportsmanship
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