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Nowadays online education has become popular as more institutes and companies are offering courses online. However, many people prefer the traditional, classroom training or study. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of both methods.

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Internet
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The internet
 has brought
revolutionary change
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a revolutionary change
revolutionary changes
 in the way we live our life and the changes it has made are tremendous,
however it
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however, it
 has fabricated a fictitious world without a physical presence called
internet
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the internet
. Some people believe that there are more merits of having virtual classes, while
other
plural of other; the people or things not already mentioned
others
 completely rejects
this
 notion and supports
typical
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the typical classroom environment
classroom
 environment.
This
 essay will discuss both merits and demerits and will suggest a plausible conclusion based on logical justification.
Firstly
, online studies will provide you a leverage to choose timetable of your own choice;
hence
, those who are working can continue their jobs without compromising on their studies.
For instance
, nowadays studying online is quite common among
student
 due to the availability of variety of tutorials on any topic or subject required,
however
, it
also
 saves our time and efforts of travelling, which consumes a lot of energy.
In contrast
, if we consider the benefits of environment of
old
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the old classroom system
an old classroom system
classroom
 system, the most important advantage is a mentor, who can clear all of your
doubt
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doubts
 through two way communication.
Furthermore
, a
classroom
 will give an opportunity to get connected with other students, have exchange of views.
For instance
, by participating in group discussion and projects,
student
 comes to know a lot about each other than
otherwise
. When it comes to disadvantages, each one of them has their own drawbacks,
such
 as, online studies
has
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have
 affiliation problem as, many universities do not accept
such
 online course as authentic as
classroom
 studies.
Further
,
student
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the student
a student
find
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finds
 it complicated to clear their
doubt
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doubts
 as usually they have no mentor available to them and they have to email their quarries or have to wait till a tutor get live with them and so on.
In contrast
, if we consider the drawbacks of traditional
classroom
 studies, it has fix schedule,
such
 as a teacher might teach hundreds of
student
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students
 at the same time and those who cannot manage to attend it will have no other opportunity to make up. In conclusion, each of them has its own merits and demerits, a
student
 will choose what is best for them on their own convenience and circumstance. In my opinion, as
classroom
 system is a traditional and widely accepted method of teaching it is more convenient to sit with a coach in class and learn things.
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