The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.

The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.
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The graph illustrates the percentages of
population
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the population
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aged over 65 in the
USA
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, Japan and
Sweden
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from 1940 to 2040.
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, the proportion
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in all three countries showed fluctuation over the period. The
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and
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sweden
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Sweden
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along with
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ups and downs in the
rate
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displayed
steady
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a steady
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rise over the period,
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Japan after a constant low
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showed a dramatic increase and reached the highest
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among all three countries by the end of the period. In 1940 the rates of population in Japan,
Sweden
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and the
USA
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were between 5% to 10%. From initial till 1960 the proportion of
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the population
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in the
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and
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showed a slight lift and continues to increase till 1980. The
USA
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from 1980 till
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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