You are due to start a new job next week but you will not be able to beacuse you have some problems. Write a letter to your new empolyer. In your letter explain your position siutation describe your problem tell him/her when you think you can startess.

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Dear Mr.Smith: I am writing to inform you that I cannot be on time to start my job on the first day we have planned. My father-in-law has been sent to the hospital because of a bad illness and poor condition, pancreas cancer. Not only

this

, but the doctor informed us that his lifespan would not

last

more than a month.

Therefore

, there are some arrangements the family members should make a consensus on and have to be on the same wavelength,

such

as how to take turns taking care of my father-in-law.

However

, I may not make it the day I start my job owing to

this

crucial emergency. In light of

this

, I would like a two-week extension until the arrangements for the ceremony and the caregiver caring for him are all settled.

Therefore

, I believe that I will be able to commence my employment in the next two weeks. Meanwhile, if projects or documents can be dealt with through the Internet, I am more than willing to work on them during my free day. I sincerely apologize for

this

last

-minute information regarding my availability and hope you understand the unexpected circumstances I am facing. Yours sincerely

Serry

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Chang

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coherence cohesion

Ensure that each paragraph presents a single idea clearly. The last paragraph could be split into separate paragraphs dealing with the request for a two-week extension and the offer to work remotely, respectively.

task achievement

While the task has been generally achieved, providing more specific information about potential start dates would be beneficial, as well as explicitly stating the job position for clearer context.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

201 words

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