School teachers are more responaibke for social and intellectual development of students than parents. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Social and cognitive development of a child is an important determinant of his future life. It is often argued that, teachers play an important role more than that of parents in
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aspect. I disagree with
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statement and will cover a few reasons to support it. In today's fast progressing world, it has been seen that a couple usually has one or two children. So,
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makes it easier for the parents to spend more time with their kids and
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teach them about the right and wrong doings of life. It is very easy to manage nowadays, in
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the act of examining resemblances
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to the past, when there were
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a number
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of offsprings, causing it difficult to concentrate on each one individually.
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, parents are often seen helping their children in doing homework, which
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, a classroom consists of 30-40 children. Paying attention to each and every student is nearly impossible for a tutor. Subjects, moral values, topics on good behaviour are taught in general and are not targeted individually for every student.
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, pupils spend only 5 to 6 hours of their day in school which forms only one fourth of their daily routine.
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makes it even
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tougher
to assess their demeanour throughout the day. To sum up, even though educators definitely
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participate in games or sport
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an important part in being morally responsible for the development of the younger generation, in my opinion, parents have a higher
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readiness to embark on bold new ventures
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to take up.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
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