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Water is a natural resources that should be free. Government should ban the sale of bottled water. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There is a general believe by some people that government ought to place
embargo
Suggestion
embargoes
 on sales of
water
 in bottled
form
 since
water
 exists naturally. In my opinion, I strongly disagree with
this
 assertion and I believe having drinkable
water
 available to
all is
Accept comma addition
all, is
 a
form
 of business that comes at a cost. To start with, there is a cost implication attached to making consumable
water
 available to all and for
this
 reason, bottled
water
 should be sold. To illustrate
further
, aqua, though widely available in the universe in
form
Suggestion
the form
 of streams, rivers, oceans, rains amongst others, is most times not good for consumption in its natural
form
. Purification of
this
plural of "this"
these
 natural resources involves a lot of processes
such
 as, filtration, carbonation and mineralization, which comes at a cost.
Hence
, it becomes necessary for organizations involved in providing hygienically consumable
water
 to charge people for the service rendered.
Furthermore
, selling of bottled
water
 is a
form
 of entrepreneurship and means of generating income for some people.
For instance
, in Nigeria, availability of few jobs and fierce competition in the job market means many unemployed people have to think outside the box and settle for other means of survival.
As a result
, Sales of bottled
water
 present many with an opportunity to generate income since there is a constant demand for drinkable
water
.
This
 is a viable business as long as
quality
Suggestion
the quality
 of the
water
 supplied and the safety of the people are not being compromised in a bid to make
profit
Suggestion
a profit
. In conclusion, availability of
hygienically
Suggestion
hygienic
 drinkable
water
 in a bottle is not free and sales of it provides an avenue for people to generate income, government should
therefore
, not place an embargo on it.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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