In many countries in the world people buy clothes and choose hair styles according to latest fashion. Why is this happening ? Is this a positive or a negative development?

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In most part of the world today, we find out that

fashion

is dictated by the current trends which includes

hair styles

the arrangement of the hair (especially a woman's hair)

hairstyles

and clothing.

Firstly

, people are moved to do things as far as they fill accepted by the

society especially

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society, especially

when it comes to current social trends

such

as music, hair styles, dancing steps and the likes.

This

is happening because everyone wants to be socially accepted and don'

want to feel left out socially or is seen not to be in tune with current trends.

In addition

this

, is the feeling that comes with it which is not standing out in the crowd as someone who is not

fashion

oriented

tagged

Suggestion

tagging

as "old school" among peers. Another thing to note here is the world has evolved

in to

expresses motion to a point on, or within, something

into

a global village,

fashion

trends,

hairs

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hair

styles

has moved

Suggestion

have moved

from within the local space to the international space where you find people dressing like people they admire outside their country or region and adopting hairstyles on foreign models.

Nevertheless

this

has its pros and cons.

which

Suggestion

Which

may

include but

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include, but

not limited to the fact that being in tune with latest

fashion

boost people's confidence helps eradicate low self esteem in people and can be a positive energy booster for some people. But we can'

ignore the financial implications of wanting to always be in tune with

fashion

trends.

Futhermore

in addition

Furthermore

, on the negative side due to

evolvement

Suggestion

the involvement

involvement

of the world today I believe new

fashion

trends come up every day, people are coming up new things aided by the use of the internet

fashion

make statements and before you know it it's trending and you find people trying to copy some of

this things

Suggestion

these things

this thing

without measuring the financial implication. As we all know what we can'

measure we can'

manage. In conclusion

Accept space

I believe that

this

is a negative development because people have moved from having

economic focus

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an economic focus

and political development into only concentrating what is happening socially.

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In many countries in the world people buy clothes and choose hair styles according to latest fashion. Why is this happening ? Is this a positive or a negative development?

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