In many countries in the world people buy clothes and choose hair styles according to latest fashion. Why is this happening ? Is this a positive or a negative development?

In most part of the world today, we find out that
fashion
is dictated by the current trends which includes
hair styles
the arrangement of the hair (especially a woman's hair)
hairstyles
and clothing.
Firstly
, people are moved to do things as far as they fill accepted by the
society especially
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society, especially
when it comes to current social trends
such
as music, hair styles, dancing steps and the likes.
This
is happening because everyone wants to be socially accepted and don'
t
want to feel left out socially or is seen not to be in tune with current trends.
In addition
to
this
, is the feeling that comes with it which is not standing out in the crowd as someone who is not
fashion
oriented
tagged
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tagging
as "old school" among peers. Another thing to note here is the world has evolved
in to
expresses motion to a point on, or within, something
into
a global village,
fashion
trends,
hairs
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hair
styles
has moved
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have moved
from within the local space to the international space where you find people dressing like people they admire outside their country or region and adopting hairstyles on foreign models.
Nevertheless
,
this
has its pros and cons.
which
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Which
may
include but
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include, but
not limited to the fact that being in tune with latest
fashion
boost people's confidence helps eradicate low self esteem in people and can be a positive energy booster for some people. But we can'
t
ignore the financial implications of wanting to always be in tune with
fashion
trends.
Futhermore
in addition
Furthermore
, on the negative side due to
evolvement
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the involvement
involvement
of the world today I believe new
fashion
trends come up every day, people are coming up new things aided by the use of the internet
fashion
make statements and before you know it it's trending and you find people trying to copy some of
this things
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these things
this thing
without measuring the financial implication. As we all know what we can'
t
measure we can'
t
manage. In conclusion
,
Accept space
,
I believe that
this
is a negative development because people have moved from having
economic focus
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an economic focus
and political development into only concentrating what is happening socially.
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