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Some people believe that lessons on becoming a good parent should be included in school curriculum. Others think that it is not essential for students. Discuss both opinions and give your own opinion.

#people #lessons #parent #school #curriculum #students
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One can understand
importance
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the importance
 of things only when it’s needed. But something is better than nothing phrase can only explain view of some people who thinks
lessons
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the lessons
 of good parenting should be taught in
school
. As per my understanding parenting lessons does not hold much
importance
 to
school
 goers. In
next paragraphs
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the next paragraphs
 I will try
consolidate
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to consolidate
 my view about
topic
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a topic
the topic
 and view of teaching good parenting in
school
. It’s of great
importance
 that one must learn about parenting. Even though generally people don’t go
for
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to
 parenting classes when it’s required. Over and above reading habits of people are
also
 on down side, which means mostly people don’t even read about good parenting. So, in
such
 a
times
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time
, thinking of some people about imparting knowledge of
such
 an important
subject
 in schools can’t be wrong, at least
seed
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the seed
 is sown.
School
 goers may not be interested in
such
 a
subject
. They can’t appreciate
importance
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the importance
 of
subject
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a subject
subjects
the subject
 because they
does not need
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do not need
this
 information at
this
 stage of life.
For
example many
Accept comma addition
example, many
 subjects are
complimented
make complete or perfect; supply what is wanting or form the complement to
complemented
 with practical experience in schools, like doing
science experiment
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science experiments
a science experiment
 in
laboratory
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the laboratory
a laboratory
. Where they can apply learned knowledge and appreciate the
subject
. But
schools
Suggestion
school
 goers can’t do parenting practical’s,
however parents
Accept comma addition
however, parents
 attending good parenting classes can do apply learned knowledge from class and can understand and experience the
importance
 of
this
subject
. In
nutshell it
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a nutshell, it
a nutshell it
 is not a wrong idea to introduce
this
subject
 in
school
, but teaching a complete
subject
 about
this
 topic is not of much
importance
 to students in schools.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Curriculum
  • Parenting education
  • Child development
  • Emotional intelligence
  • Practical life skills
  • Financial management
  • Conflict resolution
  • Real-life experience
  • Theoretical lessons
  • Cultural practice
  • Universal lessons
  • Social structures
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