Some people say taxes should be spent on health care. Other people say that there more important priorities for the tax-payers’ money. Discuss both view and give your own opinion.
People
have differing views when talking about what is best for the Use synonyms
people
’s money. Use synonyms
While
others think that Linking Words
health
care should be the utmost priority and Use synonyms
therefore
the Linking Words
budget
allotted should be increased, in my view, I personally believe that balancing the allocated Use synonyms
budget
among other sectors Use synonyms
such
as education, employment, safety and security Linking Words
are
necessary.
On the one hand, I understand the Change the verb form
is
people
who agree Use synonyms
on
the given suggestion. Change preposition
with
Firstly
, Linking Words
the
Correct article usage
apply
health
care these days almost Use synonyms
cost
Correct subject-verb agreement
costs
people
an arm and leg which makes it hard to access good Use synonyms
health
assistance. Use synonyms
As a result
, some individuals looked for alternative medicine which is a lot cheaper; Linking Words
however
, it does not have proven therapeutic claims, Linking Words
unlikely
sometimes; Correct word choice
apply
caused
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causing
worsening
of their Correct article usage
the worsening
health
condition. Another reason is thatUse synonyms
,
some remote areas still do not have decent hospitals. To illustrate, some of our fellow Remove the comma
apply
citizen
risked the Change to a plural noun
citizens
life
of their loved ones or family traveling long Fix the agreement mistake
lives
distance
in nearby cities to look for better treatment.
Be that as it may, I believe that the national Fix the agreement mistake
distances
budget
should be distributed evenly among other industries that are equally important. First of all, education should be one of the primary concerns. Use synonyms
For instance
, by giving awareness and knowledge to Linking Words
people
, most of these diseases can be prevented. Use synonyms
Secondly
, employment should not be overlooked. If Linking Words
people
have Use synonyms
source
of income they can afford quality medical assistance. Add an article
a source
the source
Finally
, safety should not be left out of the context. Because of the proliferation of crimes these days, the security should be doubled and the officials should intensify their move to fight these law offenders. All of these will Linking Words
be needing
Wrong verb form
need
Use synonyms
budget
to be done effectively.
In general, Correct article usage
a budget
although
I do not refute the idea of allocating tax money Linking Words
on
Change preposition
to
the
Correct article usage
apply
health
care, I still believe that other sectors; education, employment, safety and security need an equal Use synonyms
budget
.Use synonyms
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coherence cohesion
Use clear transition words and phrases to guide the reader through the essay. Also, consider providing a clearer structure for your main points.