Some people believe that society is becoming less friendly these days.Why do you think this might be? Suggest some ways in which this can be reversed.

In the contemporary world, there is a belief that our community is becoming less close-knit. In
this
essay, I will explain the reasons for
this
phenomenon and figure out some cures to addressing
this
. There are two pivotal factors that cause our social relationships drifting apart.
First
, technology development, especially the Internet,
make
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makes
people focusing on virtual life more.
For instance
, many people are stuck behind their computer all
day to surfing
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day surfing
day of surfing
day of of surfing
the web, make new friends on social networking sites
such
as Facebook, Twitter,…
instead
of
concerning
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concern
about their factual relationships.
Second
, nowadays, the burden on each individual is becoming heavier and heavier. We need to compete vigorously with each other to promote on the career ladder, work hard to gain enough money to supply our high living standard.
That is
the reasons why people do not have enough
time
and energy to care about others anymore.
However
, some measures can be taken to preserve the friendly relationships in our society.
First
, individuals should learn how to manage well the
time
they spend on social networking sites.
For example
, we just utilise the Internet when needed, we curtail the
time
for surfing the web and using technology gadgets.
Instead
, we can hang out with our friends or have dinner with our family.
Second
, it is really important to maintain a work-life balance. People should not be too insatiable in the workplace. Of course, being motivated is
good but
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good, but
we need to know spending
time
on other aspects of our life
such
as family, marriage, friendship, etc. In conclusion,
although
our community is not as friendly as before, but by identifying the reasons, we can take some solutions to make our society more close-knit.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fertility
  • Maternal health
  • Psychological stability
  • Social maturity
  • Economic benefits
  • Shared responsibilities
  • Ancestral customs
  • Cultural imperatives
  • Personal development
  • Career establishment
  • Societal norms
  • Lifestyle choices
  • Divorce rates
  • Life decisions
  • Subjective wellbeing
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