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Tourism is becoming increasingly important as a source of revenue to many countries but its disadvantages should not be overlooked. What are some of the problems of tourism?

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From ancient times, there is proof that people have travelled across the world.
However
,
tourism
 as
a
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an
 industry boomed only in the 19th century. Since
then
, people have travelled outside of their native country for various reasons.
Although
,
tourism
 industry has helped many economies, it
has
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also
 paused them some threats. The negative impact, the
tourism
 poses to the culture of a country is inevitable.
For example
, when Europeans travel to Asian countries, they leave their social and cultural habits which the under- developed or developing Asian cultures willingly absorb without considering the negative impact they do their own culture and habitat. In fact, Sri Lankan cuisine was known for its
goodness but
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goodness, but
 when Chinese tourists started visiting Sri Lanka as a tourist destination, Sri Lankan people unknowing started to lose their authentic style of cuisine.
Also
 with the westerners
visiting
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visit
 Asian countries, Western restaurants like KFC, Pizza Hut, Dominos have invaded the unique food styles of these countries. One of the main drawbacks of
tourism
 is the over-commercialization. In order to facilitate the requirements of tourists, countries try to create different offerings. Night clubs are increasing in Asian tourist destinations. The investors believe building night clubs would bring more tourists to a destination.
However
, it is unfortunate that these investors or the decision makers short see the negatives impacts these clubs would bring to its citizens. There have been several incidents that natives have gone bankrupt or killed themselves as
this
 new concept of night clubs is not something they are used to do. In conclusion, whilst
tourism
 can help economies to grow, it can
also
 destroy them.
Hence
 it is important that authorities take
correct
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corrective
 actions to promote
tourism
 in a way that it protects the culture of the country its citizens.
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