some people think that the government is wasting money on the arts and that this money could be better spent elsewhere. To what extent do you agree?

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Some people believe that the government should allocate more funds to other sector of the
economy
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rather than wasting money on arts and culture.
This
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essay will
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discuss how significantly other sectors
such
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as agriculture and
health
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contribute immensely to the
economy
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and
also
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explain how
life
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expectancy depends more on other sectors than arts and culture.
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, allocating revenue to
arts
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the arts
will only yield a little dividend to the economical growth when compared to other sectors
such
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as
health
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and agriculture. When more funds are disbursed to
this
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other
sectors
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sector
of the
economy
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the impact and benefits are significantly seen and can
also
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be measured in the
lifes
a characteristic state or mode of living
lives
life
of the citizens of the country and
also
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in the
economy
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at large.
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means that, there will be reduced famine (food will be readily available), people will be active to go about their normal
life
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activities and many citizens will be able to access good
health
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care services.
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, the punch newspaper in the year 2012 recorded that mortality and morbidity rate in Nigeria reduced with about 20%
as a result
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of more funds allocated to the
health
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sector.
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,
life
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expectancy depends more on other sectors than the arts in that when government spends more on
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other sectors more
life
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will be impacted than the arts because lesser people have
interest
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an interest
in
arts
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the arts
, unlike other sectors like education
,
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, health, agriculture
, agriculture, health
health
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agriculture and so on where many people show interest and will benefit from.
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, when the country authorities focus more on education
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then
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than
many
life
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's will be touched positively both the poor and the
rich
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rich, therefore
therefore
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many
life
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expectations will be met thereby securing the nation's future. In conclusion, government should spend more on other sectors that will bring more dividend to the
economy
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, but in doing
this
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the arts sector should not be neglected.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enriching society
  • promoting cultural understanding
  • development of talent
  • creative industries
  • economic benefits
  • generate revenue
  • cultural heritage
  • identity
  • prioritize spending
  • needs of the majority
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