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Reading is more educational than watching videos or TV. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Learning via online videos gaining popularity amongst
younger generation
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the younger generation
younger generations
. It’s the thought that one can acquire knowledge by reading books rather than visual communication. In my opinion, I partly agree that reading is
better
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the best
 source of
medium
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 for educational purpose. The proponents of reading strongly advocates that students should give more importance to academic reading materials
such
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 as university authorized books and research papers. They
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 argue that digital contents can be used as introduction purpose and never for core subject matters.
For instance
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, there are many YouTube videos available on human
anatomy but
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anatomy, but
 one can never become
doctor
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a doctor
by
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from
 seeing those videos. Core knowledge of any subject can be gained via reading only. Some studies
shows
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show
have shown
 that there are more brain
activities during
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activities, during
 reading than seeing television or any visual
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.
On the other hand
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, some people grasp more information from visual than books. Reading needs
lot
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lots
 of concentration and efforts to understand any education concepts.
Instead
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 of going
thru
being one more than two
three
through
 hundred pages one can acquire same level information by seeing a two
minutes
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minute
 video.
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, a three
minutes
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minute
 video will teach Newton’s law faster than school physics book.
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, digital
medium
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 makes learning fun and exciting.
This
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 feature attracts
more number
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a number
number
 of children. There are
lot
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lots
 of time and effort can be saved by using
this
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 approach. To sum up, Digital
medium
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 can be used for academic purpose and it is as effective as books and research papers. But not all subjects can be taught using videos and televisions. Important curriculums need to be learned using reading with required focus and attention.
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