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What are the advantages and disadvantages of using internet?

#internet
Nowadays, most of the people using
internet
 through
computer
, mobile phone and laptop.
Internet
 is the part of daily life. As we understand there are lots of positive side, while using
internet but
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the internet, but
the internet but
 there are some negative side as well. In
this
 essay we will discuss about the usage of
internet
. One of the, most important thing to connect with the world through
internet
. People send the business email, correspondence and letter easily to their business
personal
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personally
. You can buy food, books, cloth and so many things through
internet
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the internet
.
Secondly
, you can call and share your picture with your friends and family through
internet
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the internet
. People download movies, dramas and many fun games through
internet
. You can share your views and get more information through
internet
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the internet
. You can transfer the payment to others, pay utility bills, manage your bank account when you are out of
city
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the city
. Beside of
lot
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a lot
 of advantages,
internet
 has some disadvantages too. People spend too much time in front of
computer
 can easily get ill. Radiation of the
computer
 screen is
also
 harmful for the eyes. People want to spend too much time at home, they don’t want to go outside, which
is
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is also affecting
is also affect
has also affected
also affects
also
 effect their health. Another disadvantage is to access everything through
internet
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the internet
, beside bad or good. People make fake identification and connect with the people, so you can’t believe
on
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in
 their reality. People spend lots of time on
computer
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a computer
computers
the computer
 or mobile phones, to avoid
socialize
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socializing
 with others. To conclude, there are both positive and negative
way
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ways
 to use of
internet
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the internet
. People can decide what they required
from
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for
internet
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the internet
. I believe, there are so many advantages to using
internet
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the internet
 beside of some negative.
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