Influence of human beings on the world's ecosystem is leading to the extinction of species and loss of bio- diversity. What are the primary causes of loss of bio-diversity? What solutions can you suggest?

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Nowadays it is noticed that man's influence on the environment is resulting

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the death of some rare kind of animals

consequently

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, reducing the numbers of different animals we have

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the ecosystem.

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is because, there are no laws that govern the act of killing animals and

also

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, no serious

punishment

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for poaching, both problems can be tackled by the government by enacting laws that guide the killing of animals and giving serious

punishment

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to those who go against

such

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rules.

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and foremost, one of the reasons why several species of animals are reducing is, because there are no regulations guiding the killing of animals,

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individuals do as they like. Some people go as far as killing the animals for fun.

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means that, when there

are

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no set of rules, the society must follow before attempting to kill any animal, they take

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opportunity to do as they wish.

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as a result

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of incessant killings of animals in Nigeria, the species of animals have drastically reduced. Visiting places like Agodi garden in Ibadan is a shear waste of time and resources as there

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no diversity any longer, due to the fact that there are no rules guiding the society as regards killing of animals.

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, another thing responsible for

this

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problem is that, no due

punishment

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has been accorded to poaching. Where killing of animals

are seen

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is seen

as an offence, no serious discipline

are given

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is given

to offenders.

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means that anyone can go

scot

a native or inhabitant of Scotland

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free even after committing

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erroneous crime.

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, a crime like poaching is not taken with levity in

developed

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developing

countries

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countries, thus

thus

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you find diverse species of animals in them

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with other societies who take

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crime with carelessness.

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problem can be tackled by the

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the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit

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, by

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, enacting laws that would stop the society from undue murdering of animals,

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would control the rate at which animals are killed.

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, giving punishments that match the

offense

a lack of politeness; a failure to show regard for others; wounding the feelings or others

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to violators, when the citizens of a country know the consequences of poaching, they would think twice before they carry the act out. To conclude, lack of due discipline and increased killing of animals has led to loss of bio-diversity,

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however

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however, this

this

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issue can be handled by the government by enacting regulations that prevent poaching and by giving serious

punishment

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to offenders.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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