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In many countries people are living in a "throwaway society" where things are used for a short time and thrown away. What are the causes of this and what problems does it lead to?

Environmentalists today are campaigning for “reduce, recycle and re-use” in a bid to save the world, but we as a nation, have adopted “replace” as our mantra.
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 and many other factors are leading to a throwaway
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, and there are many problems being caused by
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 which I shall discuss in
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 essay. The reasons for our becoming a throwaway
society
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 are manifold.
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, in a quest for better living standards, we wish to own the latest
equipments
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equipment
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 and gadgets. Once new
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 are acquired, we
dispose-off
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dispose of
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 these “unwanted”
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 to
second hand
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 shops or just in the trash cans.
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, the markets today are flooded with cheap, single-use-only
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 that are more in demand than
high priced
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 quality items. Our houses and closets seem to be overflowing with goods that are more in quantity and less in value.
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, there is too much packaging done by the companies in a bid to make their
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 more attractive. The effects of
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 trend are
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 manifold. Pollution and filling up of the landfill sites by
non biodegradable
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 material is a great cause of concern. Global warming is taking up mammoth dimensions and unless we do something about it, our earth will become uninhabitable very soon. To add to it, there is intense competition and rivalry among the affluent
for becoming
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society
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’s
trend setters
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.
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 tendency has played havoc on the middle-class strata. People are working long arduous hours to earn more and more money so that they can keep up with Joneses and Smiths or else lose face.
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 is creating stress among people and people are losing social and moral values. To put it in a nutshell, I pen down saying that, the current abundance of choice
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 the ease with which
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 are discarded as soon as they lose their newness has given rise to a throwaway
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 which is having a detrimental effect on the individuals and
society
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.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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