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In many countries people are living in a "throwaway society" where things are used for a short time and thrown away. What are the causes of this and what problems does it lead to?

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In the modern society,
lives
Suggestion
the lives
 of people have become more complicated. Their requirements have changed dramatically. In order to simplify their complex
life
, they tend to buy many things to simplify their
life
. But in nowadays, people are not using these items for long term and dump these in a short period of time.
Firstly
, we need to look at why people are buying so many things in a short period of time. It is always good to buy things that make your
life
 lesser complex. Those items are becoming more affordable, widely available and that leads everyone to buy or try out these items.
Also
, people have become more attracted by the marketing strategies and advertisements of those products. Because of the people buy things
that is
 not necessary for their lifestyle. I think those are the main reasons for buying those items.
Secondly
, let’s look at what sort of problems can arise because of
this
 uncontrollable behaviour.
This
 will surely
affects
Suggestion
affect
 the financial side of each individual.
Also
,
this
 is going to impact the economy of the country if these items
are importing
Suggestion
are imported
 from other countries. Other than that, when you buy more stuff more junks are going to pile up at the home.
Furthermore
,
this
 will contribute to the environmental pollution as well. Sometimes I have seen
lives
Suggestion
the lives
 of people have become more complex than before because of the new item they purchased. In my opinion, I strongly believe that people need to more causes about what they purchase. Because of the purchases
life
 can be more complicated.
For example
, I do not spend money on a new stuff that recently introduce to the market without looking at the actual usage of it.
Also
, I am going to compare with other things in the market that does the same job before
do
Suggestion
making
doing
 a purchase. In conclusion, people need to more aware about the market and need to do a proper research before purchasing items.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
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Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
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