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In many modern societies,grandchildren rarely spend quality with their grandparents. What do you think are the consequences of this?

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Children these days are living in a world where the competition to succeed and prove themselves is a pressure on them. They seldom get any
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 to spend with their kin. They are engaged in different activities that keep them on their toes throughout the day. The concept of nuclear families
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 on the rise and there is a decline in joint families.
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, kids do not live together with their grandparents. In joint families, grandparents live along with the family and there is a lot of quality bonding
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 available. Older people nowadays, feel left out and lonely.
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 is due to the fact that the culture and lifestyle of families have changed drastically. People prefer to spend the weekends or vacation going elsewhere rather than visiting their families or relatives. A recent survey found out that, there is an increase in the number of
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old age
 homes where a lot of older people reside. They are either kicked out by their children or left to fend for themselves.
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 keeps them occupied and
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 gives them happiness. It can eliminate many of the mental sickness the elders are diagnosed with these days.
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, children should be taught to live cordially with grandparents and spend adequate
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 with them. Grandparents inculcate values and beliefs in the younger generation. They share their experiences which becomes a learning
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for
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 us. They should be respected and given the freedom to spend
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 with their grandchildren.

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